Re(1): Falling In love IP: 126.96.36.199 Posted on December 30, 2014 at 09:40:48 PM by chuckest
Your thoughts seem very real. These five stanzas, I suspect, are auto-biographical.
However, it seems each stanza is either the beginning or the middle or the ending of five separate poems. The poem starts someplace but it doesn't take us to the middle or to an end.
You have an interesting rhyming pattern, but it creates a demand fore rhyme rather than reason. In other words, it seems disjointed.
I suggest you take each of the five stanzas and complete five stand alone stories.
I just posted a few poems. I invite you to read them and tell me what you think. Chuckest
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